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Its extremely lacking in quality and then i do not mean the quality of the instruments used but the quality of the composition, it all sounds completely random and in no way contains anything interesting to the ear.
I still gave you a 3 score for the apparent effort but you really need to study some melodical insight, i mean this to be helpful.
A good idea could be for you to look into classical harmonies such as bachs work before you start making music in a genre that is completely dependant on its composition.